Joanne Adylse Lynne

This is good, but perhaps you could give it a little suspense? It feels like you've been rushing through the whole thing.

Thank you. =) It was actually something which did happen quite recently, right before I graduate from high school.

This is what happened before Biology, the last paper of the seniors' finals. I walked over to sit behind Tom, with my thick, dog-eared Biology textbook in hand. Like the ...

If I get this mail, does it mean my work is featured or something?

Hi Snoink. As a matter of fact, I quite like the third, fifth and sixth. To be frank- forgive me for that, the others don't seem to register. I don't ...

Keep doing this! I'm looking forward to reading your next chapters. This is going to be pretty awesome. =)

Basically I'm still a newbie here, but I've got to say that this site is so freaking awesome! *In fact, the bestest I've ever found so far (I've gone through ...

Good imagery, nice control of emotions. But there are some errors like: 'Good bye' (which should have been 'goodbye') and 'eye lids' (should have been 'eyelids'). Anyway, good job!

Thanks for your comment, and I'll sure think about your suggestion.=) 'Unbreathing' is certainly a word. Check it out in Secret Vampire, the first Night World novel by L.J. Smith. ...

American Wife by Curtis Stiffenfield. First, that was freaking boring. One of the reasons on why I don't usually read biographies. Second, that was um- too graphic? Tsk, tsk. Chucked ...

Um well, the first line's kind of weird. Instead of putting it in a way like- The sun is just beginning to rise as I type... it's beautiful, I think ...

When day goes, and night arrives, I shall see the stars, shining to my window, from the height of unknown. When I fall, And he comes, His hands will be ...

Hey I think most of them on the list is horribly wrong! Rock music is good, long live Elvis! Long live MCR and Evanescence. What's so important about makeups in ...

Midnight, rain falls and strong wind blows, Evelyn stands alone in the furious storm, shivering. There's nothing over her shoulders, but torn, old rags. People hurry past, and cars drive ...

That's a good idea to be carried out in school. Readers sticking notes in books from library before returning them- helps save time and energy searching for good books. May ...